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She's a diamond, while I am coal.
I am the coal, black and boring.
Set me on fire while I am alive.
Watch me burn,
Watch me die.
She is the diamond, shiny and attention-grabbing.
Lay your greedy hands on the whore.
She's there for the looks and money,
No real work,
She receives the perks.

We both wanted him,
But I bit my tongue.
What a fool I would be to ask for his heart.
He sees me as a footrest,
Only here for support and only when he needs it,
The demand for me is limited.
He lusts for her seductive nature,
Her glare blinding his eyes,
She's tearing him apart with her sharp edges,
It kills me to witness.

"I can't hurt you.
I glimmer,
she burns."

"But she is my support,
my joy,
she cares."

"She is but a coal,
weak and pitiful.
You want that?
The spineless coward?
The killer?
She's thirsty for your heartbreak,
but my fingers are gentle,
let me hold you."

His situation is himself.
I love him more than I could scream,
But I maintain my silence,
I suffer in the dark.
I see his sorrow and hate,
I beg without a soul,
I've given up on it,
I should inform him.

"My dear, I am dead.
My dear, hang your head.
Your shame,
Your misery,
Foolish boy, you brought this on yourself.
The floozy,
Your lover,
Is nothing but a fraud.
A cheap, good-for-nothing slut who's flawed.
I've been yearning for you for months,
I thought it was my time to shine.
But you don't notice my pleas.
You're more concerned with that bitch,
Not me sobbing on my knees.
I loathe your love,
Your senseless harlot.
You're just another tally for her score,
The concubine who only wants more.
You make me feel like a dog,
Keeping me away from your mind.
You two can eat your hearts out.
Promise you'll leave me be.
I'm sick of my addiction to you.
Another boy who turned his back on me.
I am clumsy,
I am disgusting,
I am bloody.
I almost dared to ask:

Can we both be ugly?"
"Can we both be ugly? We can both be ugly fucks."
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ScourgeFanatic101 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I hate those stupid diamonds............
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WQFHWCS Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Even though some people are not diamonds but coals, Fire shines brighter than any diamond.


By my standards at least
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Fire burns; it can destroy, or provide the light needed.

Your standards are true
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WQFHWCS Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Also very true. But if controled it shouldn't be a problem. Like a candle


Yes they are :'D
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
But even a small candle can create a burn when one isn't careful.

*claps* c':
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WQFHWCS Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very true, and even the tiniest spark can hurt.

:'D Lovely poem
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justabitodd Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm going through the exact same thing and god, it hurts. :l
But think about it... the right person will eventually come along and see that you're really just a pretty little diamond. :3
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know, it hurts bad. :/ But, yes, the right person will come along, and make you shine. (:
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MaraJadeSaber Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012
I know you've probably gotten this a lot, but I'm going through about the same thing. This just spoke to me so much. Thanks for sharing. We will all get through our trials!
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, it's no problem. Actually, thank you for commenting, stepping forward and telling me that it relates to you. It's my goal to reach to some with my work. And, yes, we will. We will all shine soon! :D
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Chaoschild23 Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Though you may be a piece of coal now, in time you will earn a shine of your own.
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
In time I will glimmer and be up there with the sparkles. <3
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TheWingedBoggart Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
Understanding begets Love, love begets beauty. I see blame and venom and insecurities. Being pretty isn't a fault of a crime, but selfishness is. While cut glass may sparkle like a diamond, real diamonds are born of coal, who use unbearable heat and pressure to BECOME a diamond. I wouldn't romanticize being a victim. Especially if you're choosing to remain one.
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, selfishness is a sign of being a human. I've never met a completely selfless human. Coal-girl is selfish (I would know) but that's not saying that the man or the diamond. And, yes, the diamond did go through hell to be a diamond, she just grew into the sparkle the wrong way (why I use the words 'whore', 'slut', 'harlot', ect). And, I don't believe that the coal is remaining a victim. At the end she finally stands up and confesses to the man; I don't find that someone looking for pity would do that. But, a poem is a poem, and how we view it is all individualized. (:
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TheWingedBoggart Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
Selfishness is a cousin to greed, and greed is just being scared that you wont have enough. I thought the words slut harlot and whore were used because if a women is sexually jealous, she tries to discredit the other women by attacking her sexuality. i.e. "She is showing skin and getting more attention than me. Whore. She is flirting with someone I am too shy to flirt with. Slut."
I just personally believe that a man or woman is not a trophy, or an award, not something to be "won". If someone likes someone, well, that's that. If someone doesn't like you, there's nothing to do about that, either. If I didn't like someone, and liked someone else, and the person I didn't like started boot-liking or whining or attacking the person I did like, holy shit, I would rip them a new one.
I appreciate emotional expression, and everyone is free to feel their feels.
I just felt this piece was exactly like the self-pitying "nice guy in the friendzone" bs. I have heard countless guys complain like that. "Oh, I'm nice and they only think of me as a friend, now they'll be sorry. The person they chose is just going to break their heart, then they'll see how wrong they were to rebuff me".
A really nice or generous person doesn't do something nice or generous to get something back.

And I'm really not trying to bring you down or tell you how to live your life, I just can see this from every side, cause I've been on every side. I've been sexually jealous, I've had people be sexually jealous of me, I've had people hate my partner [and me] because I chose him and not them. I just feel you are doing yourself a great disservice to spend time with resentment or anger in your heart. By the proof of you've done things for someone and you weren't together with them, I have to assume you were friends, probably close friends. If they are a real friend, and he likes someone, then you stand to make a new friend by sharing the one you've got, instead of throwing this one away. Know what I mean?

Being human doesn't mean accepting your faults, being human means we make ourselves MORE than our faults.
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doublerainbow-girl Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow nice story it says that the diamond is ugly on the inside and the coal is (or thinks that they are) ugly and bland we'll that's my opinion anyway. tell me if i am wrong.
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, a poem is how an individual sees it. Usually there isn't a 'one size fits all' for it. But, you're pretty much right. (:
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doublerainbow-girl Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i really loved your poem. you have real talent
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R-TDesigns Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
A story that has been played out a million times though it doesn't lessen the pain and I am pulling for you. :heart:
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, but I have accepted that I should move on. :heart:
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athenagodofwisdom Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012   General Artist
very nice i enjoyed it alot
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. (:
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Andharian Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Student General Artist
wow you guys must have the worst possible life ever.
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nah, not even.
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Andharian Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Student General Artist
ah, good.
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ObliviousDoll Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
God so much relation here.

Great poem!
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :hug:
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VitaLeeVee Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Student General Artist
I love it so much.
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :huggle:
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VitaLeeVee Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Student General Artist
Welcome ^^
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Icarusthedragon Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you, thank you for making this piece of writing. It brought the most private thoughts in the corner of my mind.
Although I don't entirely agree on the diamond.
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, wow. I'm reversing this, and thanking you. Thank you for reading, taking the time to comment, and relate to me. :hug:
Ah, that's fine. I'm bluntly insulting the diamond, but it's all opinions. (:
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KhaosWings Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Student General Artist
Well put it this way:
One is a diamond, the other coal. Both are carbon based just one is more compacted than the other. :D
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Basically, carbon represents being a human. We're made the same way, but are still different. :meow:
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mewXxtaytay Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
hmmm... that comment didn't work, there were little gaps between each section... but they kind of deleted themselves. POSSESED COMMENTS!! eeeep xD
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ahhh, it's fine! Haha xD
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mewXxtaytay Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
hmmm.. I thought guys went for the girls with big breasts, have the shortest shorts/skirts and are the slimmest (without being TOO thin) and prettiest.
That's how it is a school. Guy friends: I like (girl's name) Me: why? Them: she's pretty and she has big tits. Me: That won't get you anywhere in life.
I'm a flat chested girl who wears clothes that doesn't have whore clothes. I don't starve myself to death(But i am not fat) and I'm pretty to some people, but I think I am ugly(doesn't everyone at some point in life?) I like peronality, most of the time... sometimes its just random and i fall in love with someone xD. like this: me: oh look a guy... NO YOU WILL NOT LIKE HIM *instantly likes him* FUUU-
Lol (sorry long comment xD)
anyways, THIS IS AWESOME! favorited :D
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, that's a general idea of 'beauty'. Not every guy thinks that beautiful, but it's what's seen in media, so we believe that's true. And not every girl who's 'pretty' starves herself; from personal experience with anorexia and bulimia, I know that it's not just the 'pretty' girls. And I have a rather large chest. I don't think I'm ugly, but I'm not overwhelmingly pretty. It's odd. But, I like long comments. :D
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ShugarSketch Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
You're making it sound like all girls who are considered attractive by guys "starve themselves" and wear "whore clothes"

It's also not the hot girls faults that guys are shallow enough to only like them for their looks.
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mewXxtaytay Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well I didn't mean to put it like that, I was explaining the guys at my school, the only ones who aren't like that are the new people.... I'm guessing its the school...
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ShugarSketch Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
Every time a guy picks one girl over the other, the rejected girl loves to go on about how the other is a slut, whore, bitch, going to hurt him blah blah blah.

And instead of bitching out the girl, why aren't you insulting the dude for being a shallow douche since you claim the ONLY thing good about the other one was her looks?
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, it takes a good reader to realize that I'm insulting him in this too. It's just not upfront, unlike the diamond. It's saying to him that coal-girl is calling him a fool, stupid for putting himself in his spot. Besides, maybe the diamond-girl is an actual hooker. You wouldn't know. But, yes, this poem is just me bitching. I'm good at bitching, haha. (:
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acidsoap Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree, but I guess that's love. How can you be mad with someone you love a lot?
It's the same with other people telling you how he/she is really not good for you and you won't listen because you love him/her.
I guess your normal sense of reason doesn't work perfectly when you're in love..
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ShugarSketch Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
Reason only fails when the love is toxic.
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acidsoap Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
True.
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dinysrawr Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Student Digital Artist
This is amazing (:
I can feel the bitterness in it and just.. wow
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. <3
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babyvfan Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
That was genuis
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DestryDisenchanted Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, wow, thank you. (:
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
By the way, congrats on being on the front page :D
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